My name is Dorothy Gale and my journey through OZ never ended, because I am still there.
When I arrived in OZ I met a nice group of people known as the munchkins. They informed me that I had killed their nemesis, the Wicked Witch of the East. To our surprise the Witch was not dead, she was still alive. Myself and the munchkins did not know what to do, thankfully Glinda, the good witch of the north, came to our rescue and put a tragic spell on the wicked witch and sent her to her final resting place. Then, to our surprise her sister the Wicked Witch of the West showed up and wanted to reclaim her sister’s magic shoes which had a radio signal inputted in them to help her find her victims. Glinda told me to take it and keep it safe.
I was very distraught and wanted to return home to my Aunt Em and Uncle Henry. Glinda and the munchkins had informed me that I need to follow the yellow brick road until I reach the Emerald City where the great OZ will grant my wish and help me get back home. Glinda told me to use the radio signals in the shoes to help find my way to the Emerald City.
During my journey I met several creatures on the way, a liger (a lion and a tiger), and a man made of aluminum foil and a mad stuffed completely with cotton. The Liger came in handy when we ran into some evil forest creatures that tried to take my powerful slippers, and obvious attempted from the Wicked Witch of the West. Foil man was a great help while we were traveling; he was able to get a signal with the radio when we were having trouble finding one. Cotton man to be honest wasn’t much help, he only made things difficult, when a strong wind blew, and he would nearly crumble to pieces.
With the help of m newfound friends, mainly Liger and Foil Man, we made it to the Emerald City. The Great OZ agreed to see us right away, under one condition; I give him the magic radio slippers. I wanted to go home so I turned over the slippers. To my shock and amazement, he was not going to help me at all. A turn out this whole situation was one big conspiracy. The munchkins, Glinda, The Great OZ, The Wicked Witch of the West and the Wicked Witch of the East were all in on this operation. They had simply faked The Wicked Witch of The East’s death convinced me to take her slippers so I would travel the yellow brick road, hopefully make some friends along the way to only be captured and turned into flying monkeys. The flying monkeys were created to keep the city of OZ protected and in good condition. The people of OZ did not want to enslave their own, so instead they captured innocent travelers.
I never did get to return home, instead I am flying monkey in a ridiculous suit serving the Emerald City.
I like that you told this story via Dorthy's perspective. It was entertaining to see the changes you made to the story. My only critique would be to proof read it one more time; there may be a few grammatical errors. You may want to edit this one more time, and then finalize your draft for class. Outside of that, Good Job!
ReplyDeleteI did like your version of the story but I think it would be more helpful to your reader to provide a brief summary of the original. It would help them compare your story to the original and also for me personally it has been a while since I have seen the movie so a summary would help. I think the last paragraph, where the sentence begins with, They simply faked the witch's death is choppy towards the end. I think you need to add a comma after along the way. But I did like your twist on the story!
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